/lit/ - Literature

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I think first of all replace all the dashes (the - ) and replace them with commas or periods that come before and after someone speaks.

IE

>“Is this the hospitality of House Sanatorea?” He recited eloquently to the faint frozen wind that touched the courtyard, he is half-naked. His once functional armor partially covering skin and falling apart each step he took while descending from the stony mound, “the warmth of Lady Andressa or King Balmier are severely undermined by the unwillingness of their servants!” Again, no answer back.

Generally, unless it's a stylistic choice you don't use dashes to start or end dialogue. In English punctuation, we use commas, periods, and sometimes neither. Our rules are pretty weird about it sometimes because there might be a comma between pause of dialogue and other times it doesn't matter.

The dashes aside; there's a lot of run-on sentences and I think some awkward past/present tenses use here. Again, like with dialogue punctuation rules I struggle a lot with that too particularly trying to avoid past tense pitfalls when writing in present-tense. Here's my rewritten take on one of your paragraphs.

>The ghastly appearance however did not last as the figure breathed the cold air that surrounds it. Its flesh begins to grow in an unceremonious fashion. The skin regains color as its veins start to regenerate, its muscles connecting and growing to connect the lack of flesh. Skin fills the missing spots of the body where bone was once exposed. By the end of the inhuman spectacle, the otherwise corpse looked no different from a healthy athletic man, and a fair looking one at that. Where there were faulty lines that could be barely called hair, a short curly black one could be seen crowning a youthful-looking face with the lack of facial hair contrasting against thick eyebrows. The missing eye having now returned, paired with the left one in their amber color. He looked no different from a young, strong lad with no more than a quarter-century to his name, yet if he had any emotion running in its mind, his face did not betray it.

>>10281691
ok

What did he mean by THIS?

I propose this.

>>8501777
Now that ı think about it, there are cases of obligatory contractions in Spanish, which raises the question of how much this was the case or not, in the English of Shakespeare's time.

Hey /lit/, anybody here ever read two novels at the same time?

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>Constantine has infected this board too
Is nowhere safe?

how come /lit/ doesn't get smarter over time?

if you've been on /lit/ for a long time, surely you're aware of the idea that this is a pretty sophomoric board, mostly pretentious undergrads. but this has always been the case. "/lit/ has always been shit".

but shouldn't the original undergrad population of /lit/ already have graduated? or are /lit/izens a rolling demographic, bleeding out people, and acquiring new plebs at sort of equal rate (which would explain the permanence of some threads).

idk, what's the deal?

>>7397515
Once I spent three classes wondering why my professor gave our class a break. Check syllabus, no assignments. Feels nice. Next class comes and the professor asked who wanted to present first.

Plebbit's /r/books has a list of two hundred of "Reddit's favorite books", here: http://www.reddit.com/r/raerth/comments/cpxkq/reddits_favourite_books/c0udvs9

What do you think of the list? Does /lit/ have something similar?

>Your favourite Shakespeare play

>Most underrated Shakespeare play

>Most overrated Shakespeare play