/lit/ - Literature

>>16587018
Right, right, looking at it like that, it does reads like I'm just making random calls to an emotion rather than invoking someone's personality. I'll make some direct, "It made me feel like X" and then immediately slip into an overlong description void of any personality or pertinence to the character himself, only to build the scene after apparently slipping into my instincts to write in third person. It ends up being the worst of both worlds. It's just "Call to emotion" and "Florid description" sandwiched ad infinitum.

Thanks for the input. It's pretty obvious I need to rewrite it, but I'll need to decide if I want to continue practicing first person or just throw up my hands and go back to third person even though the story never leaves his perspective.

A Storm of Swords

Probably one of the best Fantasy books I've read.

>>6694420
>Looks and sounds like count dracula, then again as the good book says: "even satan crafts himself into an angel of light" or something to that effect.

lol
I wish I had his voice/accent, pretty badass

>yfw you watch Macbeth trailer

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RgH_OnrYlCk

Written and Directed by Shakespeare.

Gravity's Rainbow isn't even that hard...