/lit/ - Literature

>>10767922
Thank you. From a straight guy that might be the best critique I can get lol.

I'm not even gay myself, though I am bisexual. I just think there's something artsy about homosex. Like that sexual tension in greek statues.

>>10024124
>>10024135

Yeah, throwing in a whole lore and other world just complicates thing. It makes the MC seem more important than he is. He isn't important. He's really not. He just happens to be the object of fascination for this deity/tulpa, and vice versa.

>>10024185
It's not about submission versus domination or whatever. It's more about how bodies clash in a certain way and how women, no matter what I do, are always seen as soft and malleable. I don't want soft in a protagonist's body.

Basically we're talking about forms of sculpture. If you look at a Rodin, his forms of women are beautiful but they're boring and smooth and I'd rather look at shit like this in terms of art.

>>10024225
World building is fine but every jackass and their second cousin has done the "breakdown of structure in the heavens" thing and the "hohoho you are an immortla being and you concern yourself with puny humans" thing. It's fucking boring.