/lit/ - Literature

DFW @ college probs (make sure u can juggle juxtaposin ur #humblebrag self-effacing "introspection" regarding ur own legitimacy w/ ur well timed lat n ab flexxxin')

if ur a dark n sexy type Sade but u have to intentionally misquote him n keep the S&M down to 50 Shades lvls unless she's a daddy-didntcare broken sort of screamer in which case whip dat beeetch

also b fuccin ripped n stop giving a shit bout intellectually impressin ne1 n ull do gr8 2 m8

>>5560540

these statements by the narrator rnt exactly profound or interesting to really read in any way and thats alright if thats the point you're going for but as an excerpt in its own right its doesn't convey the gravity of an innocuous situation that i think's the point. uncouth's a good word hurr but its prolly the only thing that stands out in a passage like this and frankly that's not good enough 2 be a ~dOp33 @$$~ writer man. you seem like ur on a good track though, keep up stuff dawg

>>5561020

the first 2/3rds of this is p. bad and rly disjointed in terms of doing run-on sentences badly and just being awkward but man those last 4 sentences (bar "out and in the water" which could've been shortened to "around" or "buffeting him within the waters") were funnier than i expected. From this you seem better as someone who uses descriptors to imply situations than as a pontificate or w/e. Stick w/ that and work on parsing down what you put forward.