/lit/ - Literature

>>7199125
don't go for this sort of thing but
>From Haeckel’s soul to souls of Cenobites!
that's quite funny and a comparison which works in an interesting way too

>>7199157
i remember liking this before, and i like it even more now.
>stark-white void
stark white doesn't work in context and void is generally a terrible word used by hacks so ditch that too
>estuary of glass
nice
there is something "obvious" about the last sentence. can't place finger on what it is exactly. otherwise great.

>>7199314
write in a state of great inebriation with a practised non-focus on the quality of writing. edit later.

>>7199341
this is really slick and to the point. i feel like it is a cut-up of other stories in the previous critique thread..

>>7199476
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>>7199453
these ones are less good. you can't just expect the default program settings to do all the work for you

>>7199756
i like this, its off-beat and good fun in a Pratchett sort of way. i like that it's simple and clearly spoken, unlike so much of what gets posted in these threads