/lit/ - Literature

>>21262238
Thank you for the encouragement anon, I actually was shopping it around and got all rejections so was in middle of re-editing when other guy was nice enough to ask for a read back. I'll definitely polish it a bit more and try again.

>>21262357
Thank you so much for the feedback and regarding #1 the voice is very intentional and on #2 you hit on probably the core issue - as this is a spin off from a scene early in a book it puts out ideas that aren't resolved until much later. But a bit showing consequences could carry a lot of weight. Appreciate the typo catch!
>>21262391
Funny enough the book plays on similar ideas. The main character is unknowingly reenacting the contents of the book (which are different) and meets the obsessed character who he tricks into lending him the book. MC grows more obsessed with it, and Obsessed guy loses sanity and stalks MC until they team up to reenact the conclusion/learn the true ending. No idea how I could fit that into flash fic without bloating word count like crazy tho.