/lit/ - Literature

>>4127329
No problem Anon, I'm here to do catstuffs and some of my best catwriting was done on catnip. You should see the one I did on catlsd about killing some guy. It's non fiction.
Let's see. Again as I've told others, you don't use and following a comma. Also you've now got sentences that are chopped up and could be combined. Your overall structure could use some work, but it's coming together better.
>Now, I mostly sat on the balcony of my one bedroom apartment. I read, wrote, and drank to pass the long hours of the daytime no matter how hot or cold it was outside.
to
>Now, my time was spent reading, writing and drinking on the Balcony of my one bedroom apartment exposed to the elements.

>Often in that moment, the pages would be damp...
to
>Often in that moment the pages would be damp; from spilled alcohol or my own tears, I didn't know. I was dying.
Your bit about
>eager to try the whisky
should be removed, doesn't fit well with the image of a poor dying fellow who's been drinking his sorrows away for a while now.

Blah, I have to go back to do more catstuffs, I can't catch any breaks around here. I'll try to critique you a bit more on your other three parts when I get back later. Don't ever get a catjob.