/lit/ - Literature

>>21312726
This is a funny little impasse. You know that by making fun of me you're proving my point (or at least I would hope you do), and it would seem that by pointing that out I'd be arguing with you, and thus engaging in an argument, which you presumably think invalidates everything I'm saying. That said, the entire point of this little idea is to become less involved with the constant battle of egos that makes arguments so unpleasant. The point is that instead of getting annoyed with people's often disingenuous methods of argumentation like OP did, you can just walk away. If an argument is just a quick ego boost in 99% of cases, then it really doesn't "mean" anything to either win or lose an argument. It's really just going to come down to the transient, meaningless, and short-lived emotions of the participants. Who cares?

>it's the bargain-bin "haha i am... LE TRIPFAG!!!" episode again, where the tripfag tries to establish himself by making absolute sure you know he doesn't like you or care about your opinion... while simultaneously taking a name by which you identify the person, and which composes the only possible way anyone could even form an opinion on the Epic Tripfag
I swear, I've seen this so many fucking times. Some eager beaver retard playing the same games for the same egotistical reasons. It's trite and boring.

>>20434472
Ideas? Never had one in my life.

>>20381131
>Colorful, funny

>>20320164
>What is my illness, Doctor Bucksneed?
Have you ever in your life asked what your illness was? There's something very off with using the word in this context—it sounds fake, insincere and inhuman (unless that's the point?).

The rest of my critique will be in regards to the whole of your text, instead of individual segments. Honestly man, I really wanted to enjoy reading this as it appears to be something you've put a lot of extensive thought, editing, and self-critiquing into, specially curating it to fit a certain stylistic poise, but you did so to the point of belaboring the text into a soulless sterility—it's clinical in it's stiffness (once again, perhaps the point since he's a doctor [haha]? But it becomes a chore for the reader, and detracts from any potential humor your attempting to convey). The juxtaposition between the doctors soliloquy, and the the stream of consciousness is an excellent idea in a vacuum. The difference between the long, scientific speech and shorter spurts of ideas, thoughts and feelings would have been good, but the stream of consciousness that your paragraph curates is not the desperately needed fresh garden salad after the fucking overcooked roast I just ate. The vernacular used is just a little to abrasive to develop a cohesive meter while reading (vicissitudes? really, nigga?). The alliteration and imagery were quite nice, and honestly, the more I read it out loud the better it sounded. There were a few phrases that tripped me up and found quite awkward to parse through (e.g. a lover whose slippers linger my doorstep—I kept trying to add in prepositions after linger, or even pluralize it), but about half way through, when I realized I'm not hear to understand, but to experience it began to flow much better. So I tried to critique this less from a literary standpoint and more from a merit of... artsy-ness? And as a stand-alone paragraph it's really interesting, but when contrasted with the former paragraph I FUCKING HATE IT.