/lit/ - Literature

>>15067035
Nah, too bland, let me redo it:

The shortish fiend sat onto the maiden's belly, as in lost in deep thought; the lady, dressed in a satin nighting-gown, was lost ina mixture of terror and ecstasy, as if her mind was as undecided into what to make of the situation as much as she was lost between waking life and unconsciousness. The darkness that revolved around her added into the atmosphere of horror in which she was inserted, and the scarlet draps around increased the feeling that she was put into a place of horror, the same color of blood.

What thoughts were going through that diminutive mind of hers? The terror was coupled with a sort of awakening fear, a fear that we feel as we are thrown into a life-or-death situation, which perhaps ironically made us feel more alive than ever; but she was caught in a state of terrible awaking nightmares, and the impression she had was that this terror would never end.

>>14072322
It was only me anon, this thread is moving rather slow so the anons who post here get my full attention. I'm glad the critique has helped you.

>>13346729
>just ad hominen and no real arguments from a seething loser
lmao

>>11781390
I hope you're aware that Wernicke (as well as Broca) are primarily language centers in the brains, which is why a debilitating disorder of grammar and syntax is named after them. Pulling brain pseudoscience out of your ass helps no-one, and I say this as someone who completely agrees with you and abstains.