/lit/ - Literature

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Thanks, I appreciate you taking the time to give feedback, and I appreciate how positive it is.

I was aprehensive about background dumping heavily during the opening which is why I attempted to trickle in exposition a little less heavily through dialogue while a more interesting story element is transpiring, but maybe it is a bit unrealisitc. I can see how the multiple names so early on can get confusing.

>Have you read up on writing craft...

No not at all. To be honest I am that new that a lot of the terms given - what differentiates standards from literary devices, or even their accurate defintion (yes I am that naiive), are new to me. I think immersing myself in literature on writing and story telling would be a great help to me.

The proposed change reads so much better and is a great example of how I can do better going forward.

I think I really need to brush up on literary theory and story composition, and of course continue reading more.