/lit/ - Literature

>>10291778
Sorta, the ass is firm. I'm ignoring the common rules of recent pregnancy like the darkened nipples for sexist story telling purposes.

>tfw writing on your phone gives you a shithouse idea of page formatting.

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>>8547034
Would you read a book set in a world where all conflict is forcibly resolved on a turn-based basis?

So I figured you guys might appreciate this.

My friends and I have started doing a bi-weekly critique of each other's work. One of my friends, though, submitted a rather...peculiar? work this last weekend. My friend and I reviewed this particular work and immediately realized the problem:

There's a ton of sexual discussion in it.

"What's wrong with that?" you might ask. Well, this was a chapter in a series he has been writing, featuring an entirely female cast of monster girls. The protagonist is a skeleton girl and in this chapter, she is allegedly coming to terms with her sexuality by exploring her burgeoning lesibanism through a quadruple amputee psychic who wants to get "plowed" by her.

During the adventure, the protagonist learns that she can get pregnant, befriends a monster woman who fucked the protagonist's mother twenty one times, and goes into detail with the protagonist, who is unfazed by this information.

We went and pointed out these flaws to our friend, and he adamantly defended it as injecting "realism" into his story.

He's taken criticism pretty well up until this point, but on this one fucking subject, he wouldn't fucking budge.

What do you guys think? Is monster girl quadruple amputee sex alright in a novel?