/lit/ - Literature

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Here you go. I like this sort of existential anxiety he seems to be having over the wording of how to describe an osprey attacking a fish (is that what's happening here or am I misreading?). It's odd but intriguing. I think in a previous thread I said you should have more visceral and characteristic descriptions of your character, and you said that stylistically you wanted to keep them vague. Now that I've read more I agree with you, it works better like this. Otherwise, it has potential, but it's not exactly my style. I think too many short sentences kills flow and makes writing difficult to read. But that's just personal taste. All my edits just reflect what I think would sound better, but it's just my opinion. Give mine a read if you get a chance
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