/lit/ - Literature

>>10072746
>>10072752
Yeah this is...pretty bad.

For starters its not " - " its " -- " they mean entirely separate things. Regardless of that even if you were using the correct one you're not even using them properly, they're meant to denote digressions in a sentence that are vaguely related, basically they should not be a critical part of the sentence, the sentence should not be any less if for some reason the digression was never there.

You have a big problem with run on sentences, you're not using semi-colons properly or ending your sentences when they should be, you're not breaking your paragraphs when you should be and inserting white space where it would be nice to have.

You specified that its a winter morning twice in the same sentence, shit like that.

And as the previous anon stated you're inserting random words and lines into the middle of sentences for no reason.

>"and all the hullabaloo"
Seriously, what the fuck DID you mean by this? Why is the word "Ecstatic" behind and ellipses and why is it italicized?