/lit/ - Literature

Guys, how do you feel about PoV swaps mid chapter? I've kinda tried to tie specific plot beats / important information to different PoVs who are at the same place, at the same time, and I kind of swap between the three of them all the time whenever something specifically tied to each character's "domain" happens. I'm kinda trying to give the reader a more holistic view of all the different elements that go into the story without having (more) 12k word chapters, since all of them give unique insight into specific things.

For instance, I have:

1. One guy who is very earthly, he has a very realistic perspective on people and events, and knows a lot about how people work

2. A second who is very faithful (in the religious context), and he has a more divine / magical view of events and certain story beats, as well as having knowledge into the esoteric and magical parts of the world

3. And a third who is a thrill-seeking schizo that experiences weird visions from time to time, thus giving uniquely vivid insight into his surroundings. I use him for some of the more mysterious parts of the story & setting up questions that get answered way down the line.

I kind of mix and match these guys, sometimes they have their own chapters, but more often than not, there is at least 2 PoVs per chapter. Is this a bad move? I make the swaps very clear and very obvious with how much different my verbiage & flow is for each character. Thoughts?

>>22969049

The first bit sounds way more natural than the other two. I have a shit ton of alliteration in my writing, and it always feels way smoother when I write it without thinking about it too much. You can leave the first bit in and rewrite the rest normally, but what I'd do is just make a note and leave it for later in case an idea pops up.