/lit/ - Literature

>>21499150
Makes sense. Images are honestly my preferred way to read other people's writing in these threads. (But it's a good exercise to try to fit as much story as you can into the 3000 character limit.)

>>21448176
Very vivid and tight. You made good use of the short length.

>The sun had not yet risen above the horizon, it was not bright enough to hurt her eyes; she scratched the inside of her arm instead.
Killer 'instead'.

>the object in front of the rose bush
I can't guess what this object is, and if the idea is that it's supposed to be unspecified and abstract, I don't think it works. ('Papery hands' is a nice touch, though.)

This line lets down, a little, for me:
>A tear had barely begun to roll down her cheek before she sniffed and wiped it away.
I can't really articulate why, but it feels a bit obvious and weak. It communicates 'she's sad' but nothing else. I think the piece deserves a more surprising, or at least stronger, closing image.

Fucking bleak.

Just post your creative project, or an interesting excerpt from an obscure book you found, instead of coming up with schemes and systems for making creative projects and finding obscure books.

>>20967850
>>20967848
It's tough, dude. I don't know why I keep posting stuff here, keep refreshing in hope of responses/critiques. It seems the only surefire way to get a response is to post an excerpt of your WIP and preface it with 'It's shit isn't it?' or 'Tell me how bad this is.'

For what it's worth, I read your Murnane paraphrase last night and thought it was a neat idea -- relatable, especially the sense that reading leaves you haunted with these images that are sort of independent from the books that evoked them. And the implicit idea that you have to *do something* with those images.

I need to find a different forum. Hopefully one with less Great Books worship, and less of the sense of despair that taints everything on 4chan.