/lit/ - Literature

>>6388116
It's too prosey. It's decent though, but it has a very short range of people who will 'get it' which isn't all that clever when you're appealing to five hundred people.

>>6387961
Micheal Gira plz go

>>6387674
Did you read the unabomber's manifesto and tried to write that Finnegan's Wake style? It's just a jumbled mess of nothing that means only something to whomever wrote it.

>>6385522
This is interesting, and it does a great job of relating the imagery back to the subject of of the poem. I would just recommend adding more feeling, but otherwise would make great filler or B-Sides

>>6388219
This is extremly well written! My only fear is that it doesn't go over much. Loved the repetitious use of, 'See,' but there isn't all that much to see. It's like a looping ride of It's a Small World After All, the trip is the same and you only start to See the same things.


>http://pastebin.com/XWhSXKQQ