/lit/ - Literature

good morning sirs. I've wanted to get into writing and I'd appreciate if you could give some critique to this
https://pastebin.com/Pgv13iRA

its the start to a small adventure story not entirely sure whether to develop on it or not. Trash it all you want in any specific area I'm only starting so I'll take any criticism.

i know a girl in her early 20s that has only read books written by pornstars

>>14603147
got the Sayori list?

when i was young (4-10) i used to read all day every day, it was all i really had to do as a poor kid growing up

i started reading again in september as i wanted to read up on an artist i really enjoy, and everything just clicked. i can imagine things exactly how i want to in my head when i read and because a book is much easier to put out than other formats, i can find info on niche topics i couldn't find a documentary or video about.