/lit/ - Literature

>tone of my voice was somewhat monosyllabic
lol

It's okay, OP, needs work and something to make it more interesting. Try to divide it into three acts and see if you're lacking in any front. Not telling you to add an introduction or some dumb shit, just see if you really feel it progresses at the rhythm you really want.

>>5719635
I think this was a critic thread. I want to believe this is a critic thread.

>>5719626
That's nice for you? You have really low standards...

>>5657008
(like any decent person should do)

>>5631158
You seem to be getting a very particular interpretation of what "literary merit" means. Merit, like most virtues, by tacit definition can't be measured.