/lit/ - Literature

Posted this last thread, I got some feedback so I want to try again before comiting to this until the bitter end.
Rate and h8 the first chapter of what I envision as a slice of life story about a magical girl who struggles with overpowering homicidal desires.
I finished writing this and I suddenly didn't understand who the fuck would read this, even if it were masterfully crafted. I wrote it for myself and I don't think it will be very popular or liked at all. It's almost smut at times, but it never gets there. It feels like it wants to be American Psycho/Crash but written by a weeaboo: "Serious" readers wont like it because it's anime shit. Anime readers wont like it because it wants to be serious shit.
Hopefully I'll manage to strike a balance between the two by the end of this venture (which is what I'm aiming for). I just want some final feedback before posting it (and finishing it) somewhere else. Just let me know if you make it to the end and what you thought about it.
(If you're feeling generous, drop some stories similar to what I'm trying to do here)

https://files.catbox.moe/6tqt1m.txt