/lit/ - Literature

>>20821999
This is far from the worst thing I've ever read, but it seems a little boring, though I've never been a huge fan of most fantasy to begin with. I didn't read all of it but what I read wasn't bad. I definitely know people that would read the shit out of something like this.

>>20822805
I feel like a lot of your sentences go on for too long. Maybe try to shorten them up and drop some of the longer descriptions. It seems like you use commas as periods sometimes. There are also some areas where I think you probably edited it but missed some things,
>after waking up on the beach having with only a few...
>having with
Personally, I think if these descriptions aren't absolutely necessary for the story, many of them can be dropped or shortened for a more readable piece. Not that details are bad, but I feel you have a lot more than most people.

>>20822174
you should post at least some of your writing. If it's bad yeah someone is probably gonna shit on it, but some people here will try to give you good feedback

>for people looking at my writing, please don't just shit on it if it's bad.