/lit/ - Literature

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Hapless fool content with little
he knew not of desire
Seamless days unmarked; soon turn stark
Struck sublimely such cupids worth
hapless fool full of lust

Fools heart burn with wilting fire
He knew not what to say
alone his days turn dark
Faintest ember may yet turn dust

Hopeless fool restless he be dream he brave fire
Climbing ever higher
only to struggle to speak
If only, but if only she knew!