/lit/ - Literature

>>13105905
Could you explain what you mean by "lives up" and "humble"? I don't mean to sound stupid but I'm on LSD at the moment and I just wrote the poem a couple of minutes ago by typing whatever came to mind without stopping, so if anything seems intentional I promise its not because idk wtf I'm doing.

Here's another if it's no trouble

>>13105578
this might be trivial but no pot smoker I've ever met refers to the weed they smoke as "cannabis", so that kinda makes the dialogue a tiny bit hard to believe.
>Naomi was silent a moment
I might just be stupid but I don't think that makes sense
Your last paragraph is your strongest. The way the story's context reveals itself throughout the page in a striptease-like manner provokes curiosity and interest; you did a good job.