/lit/ - Literature

>>17493615
>>17498914
>frens have been furloughed
>der Memeendsieg entschieden
>our Tendie War won

>>17499002
Lapidary, title and “A yellow stink ... our departed race.” good hooks

>>17501881
>They tear at your face
>furrows already frozen
>you hear their thunder
>it echoes within
>your own storm
>diamonds you cast from the eye
>and thrown from on high
>as a pair of birds
>as two lovers
>dancing through the sky
>You offer your lights to Heaven
>Alas my love, you were rough:
>Winter had to polish your hot blood
>with its hidden golden seams
>You join me
>unburdened and familiar
>Enter the hearth
>and melt by my fire

Quite enjoyable. A hopefully not too bowdlerized adaptation, for you

>>17494545
Robinson Jeffers
Bukowski

>>17494584
Listen to his own reading of it to confirm suspicion, otherwise investigate the references/making of

>>17495054
You have me for the first two lines, which I wouldn’t change necessarily. Find a rhyme scheme following them up, otherwise cut the word count by 1/5th and do another pass on the imagery.