/lit/ - Literature

>>6395440
you've got a good technic. But your choices are pretty derivative. If I would suggest something, it would be to find new ways to express "darkness" and "blood" and all these derivative things.

>>6394535
I can see you've been praticing, but it still kinda weak, don't give up.

>>6394418

It is gonna be undeniable cute to a layman, you're good to go if you want some girls, but if you want to improve, here is the honest truth about this piece you showed us: it's horrible and generic. You need better references on romantic poem. Can you share what you've been reading?

>>6391474
godamnit anon, you're fine! keep training and improving.