/lit/ - Literature

>>7841068
7/10
quite nice, you have an eye for words and concepts which similar poems itt lack. would be greatly improved with less wordiness though - you got the balance in the first 6 lines but the rest was tiring to read.
>>7841054
8/10
also quite nice, a delicate touch to your imagery and diction. only suggestion is to be more careful with where you put your line breaks - sometimes they seem a little arbitrary.

>>7839054
your haikus actually refer, at the least, to nature, so you automatically trump every other shitty haiku here. also stop writing haikus.

>>7838963
4/10
makes my eyes roll, but your rhythm is fairly natural. write about other things so you don't sound like a more literate La Dispute or some shit.
>>7838896
definitely my favorite Frost poem why you posting it in a critique thread though :0 :(
>>7838891
JOHN FRUSCIANTE LYRICS - Hope - A-Z Lyrics
also they suck
>>7838871
5/10
straighten up your metre aka get some metre in most places. also try to tie your different images together more clearly