/lit/ - Literature

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>Submit small segment of novel to workshop class
>It was rushed and involved a lot of exposition.
>Fully realize only after I submit it all the rest of the problems I'm going to list now
>the dialogue is stilted, forced, and just generally awkward exposition that I couldn't fix in time
>there's probably too much bullshit going on with the dream machine thing and then the dream machine thing being destroyed leaving most likely only two characters able to use lost technology and the VR world remaining undiscussed for 99% of the story because the only reason it matters its to set up this idea of the MC wanting to return to a corrupted version of the VR world. Then, I have to have it make sense that the world doesn't fall completely into chaos because of reliance on fucking magic, which I haven't decided how to do yet.
>Real story is just between three characters and doesn't necessarily even need all this complex shit.
>The part I'm going to share is just plain shit where I use the cliche of "oh look here's this guy who should know shit, but I'm gonna make a lame excuse for him to not know shit so I can dump exposition on you during his 'training' where I suddenly and accidentally end up making up some kind of techno-magic academy. The kind of cliche shit only a fanfiction faggot would write.
>I now have several pieces from several different perspectives all scattered around in time despite not even being sure I have an outline and being and utterly terrified with the idea of forming an outline even when my instructor strongly recommended I develop one. There's even a part where a character has a flashback.
>Remember when I wrote my previous works that people liked, I could feel myself enjoying what I was writing and almost trying to stop myself from saying this is great and all that. I didn't have this kind of feeling writing this part...

God fucking damn it. I don't even know what I'm doing any more