/lit/ - Literature

>>2323558

Then you're retarded.

>OMFG I LUVVED ME DAT HANNAH ARENDT, GRATE HISTOARIANN SHE NEEDS TO BE MOAR IRONIC THO HURR DURR HURR DURR HUUUUUUUR DUUUUURRRR

>>1998737

>White stripes, like the tigers.

I hate to break it to you, fistpump, but tigers have BLACK stripes. Also, should that be 'like the tiger's', ie like the stripes of the tiger, or 'like the tigers' as in similar to a large number of tigers all together. Either way, they still have black stripes, but it would help with the comprehension of your execrable poetry or 'novel' or whatever the fuck this nightmare is.

PROTIP: Poetry takes a lot longer than prose to write, and your drug-addled first drafts are not poems. This is like bringing a sketch of a woman and saying please rate my painting of the crowd at Aintree racetrack.

If you work on the thing, polish it, think about your metaphors, about rhythm and scansion, about metre and rhyme (even if your thinking about it leads to the idea 'I don't want it to rhyme, and I want to fuck about with the metre'), then maybe it will be worth reading, although I'm not optimisitic.

In the meantime, this is unedited shit, nothing better than an idea, not even a first draft, and I'm irritated that you've wasted my time by bringing unfinished work to the table. Especially work of such disgustingly low quality.