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LITRPG FOR ROYALE ROAD

Thanks for your advice in the last thread. I tried to fix it and also added a new chapter. Read it, there is the first fight of the story.

>Info-Dump
As a school, the professor needed to explain things, but I still polished it to make it smoother.

>Uncle
I polished his dialogue too, trying to see his 'info dump' dialogue like boomer ranting.

Show instead of tell
I changed almost all adjectives with descriptions without putting in my personal opinion, but I left what is actually good for the general flow, such as:
>She raised her voice to attract the attention of other freshmen."

Send your opinion.:
Here you can read without download
https://smallpdf.com/result#r=3a9e4008f77ae8dc89f82d54dbdb15bf&t=share-document

LITRPG FOR ROYALE ROAD
Hello, everyone! Some time ago, I posted my story, and now I've fixed it with the advice you sent me. If you've read the first version, please share your opinions and let me know if I have improved.

PDF and EPUB
https://filebin.net/lw7qd3vtju8siju1

>Github
"Sorry, I found a cool way to create the status window and it requires a file.

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https://filebin.net/oalg0o0e8uwbi7uc
https://github.com/Kino-Man1/FFF-Unlucky-Guy/tree/main

I wrote chapter 4, but before publishing on scribbleHub, I will fix the narrator in the first three chapters.

Additionally, may I use AI-generated images in the chapters?