/lit/ - Literature

Alright. Lets do this.

What is good?
what is bad?

teach me. I want to learn.

I am having this one turned into a song, and while I imagine it will change in order to fit a tune regardless of what I do with it, I would appreciate any notes in touching this up.

>>11091729

interesting idea. lost its place (for me) about half way through, but that final stanza is some beautiful imagery there. gonna keep me thinking tonight.

>>11091362

i generally don't like poetry thats just about a girl, but you did pretty well with this one, giving it a theme other than just gushing over one. i especially like the ending.

>>11090614

started out nice, but when you get to the victim bit and the kill bit, you sound really edgy.

thank you everyone who helped me fine tune this over the last week. still not perfect but I definitely got where I want it to be emotionally. the second couplet still bugs me but i went ahead and put in a print order.

I hope he likes it.