/lit/ - Literature

>>22966854

Good luck, friend. you can always improve your prose with later releases a lot of debuts are pretty clunky but if you're good enough you can refine what you write into something better.


>>22967237

I've never woken up from a bad dream covered in sweat before that's only happened to me if I'm having some intense fever with it maybe add in a little delirum and fever to mix it up a litte. How is the mist related to what the man is going through psychologically? You're going to have to expand more on that and then it can be a pretty good piece.