/lit/ - Literature

>>18173946
It’s not my fucking thread, O little Anon. I read capital L Literature like Pound and Joyce, but it’s exhausting... I’ve been bingeing Berserk for half a week to sate my power fantasies because I’ve become emasculated by University and need to feel like a real man. Honestly haven’t read much SFF at all since highschool when I loved Pratchett.

to the guy in the last thread who crit'd my work, thanks for reading it, its hard to post anything here with meaning due to the character limit but the punctuation recs are useful. It wasn't an eastern euro country, it was another planet, but it was a deep cut reference to eastern europe so I guess it worked.

>>18158397
>zoomed the screen on the dots
This is a little hard to imagine, it took me a few moments to realise he was zooming in with the screen. I think it’s just unintuitive from the way you described it. Might be me though.
>not birds comrade
Needs to have a comma there after birds.
>prodded the screen
Is he actually poking it? Seems a bit weird.
>Yes Captain
Needs a comma after yes.

I have no idea why this is a sci fi set in what seems like Eastern Europe with planes... try to find an excerpt that won’t need a lot of assumed knowledge, because I got nearly nothing out of that.