/lit/ - Literature

>>21898611
I hear you but I wouldn't even consider that a pacing issue. That's a clarity issue and any sentence can have clarity issues regardless of active/passive status.

Perhaps unpracticed writers are less likely to have clarity issues with the Active tense because it explicitly states the doer each sentence. But this is a weakness to address rather than encouraging people to cower in a kiddie pool of possible sentence/para structure.

>>20119697
I'm no pro, but have gotten a few compliments on my prose from the psueds on here recently. Alliteration is one easy method to improve sentence feel, but I've also begun using "Loose Alliteration/tongue side preference", I'm sure there is a real term for this among poets but this is what I call it after learning about it in a historical linguistics book.

I'll explain it like this, written language is a reflection of the spoken word, so you should be reading all your prose aloud for mouth feel. The human tongue is often prone to tripping up on shifts from sounds made at the front of the mouth (ta- da- na- sha- sa- th-) to those made at the back of the mouth (ma- ba- fa- ka- la-). It can feel really pleasant to maintain focus of sounds in a sentence (or extended periods of a sentence) in one of these two realms for this reason. Think of when you hum a song - you probably say "doo-nee-noo-nee-noo" or "fa-la-la-laaaa" and subconsciously do not cross this barrier. Within words crossing the tongue sides can also result in sounds being dropped or unintentionally added (e.g. some people say athlete as 'ath-uh-lete") and is thought to be a primary cause of linguistic drift over time.

Unrelated, but there is also the poetic idea of "sound painting" I believe it's called where you select words that make a similar noise the object being described.