/lit/ - Literature

>>10266574
You made the dialogue sound very energetic, every sentence shapes a vision and it changes the sentence after. It's interesting and well written. I like it.

>>10266567
I'm trying to go the cyberpunk route, light hearted moments, while the world is gloomy. I'm slowly building up towards the actual story, but would you say my prose is too pretentious and detailed? I like describing my vision, while I try to make others replicate the image I have in my mind. It's hard to differentiate what I should leave out.

I'm trying to improve, going to start reading tomorrow. I've never really read anything, so I've still got the well-written books to explore. Ordered Neuromancer, Do Androids Dream of Eelectric Sheep and Fahrenheit 451 (Per suggestion).

Do you reckon this is an interesting read? It's in the first few pages so I'm still gathering audience and building up the dynamic of their relation.