/lit/ - Literature

I enjoy reading. I'm really impressed by well-written texts, and I understand what I read. But I'm terrible at speaking/writing. I'm not talking about grammar itself, I can write well in my native language; what messes me up is organizing my thoughts and putting them into texts. (Speaking is even worse, and I've already given up on it, but writing gives me time to think before 'speaking'). And even though I've read a considerable amount of books, I just fail. Does anyone have any tips, suggestions, or a guide on what I should do to improve my writing?

Just gonna post this once more. Would you read this? This the introductory paragraph to my story.

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Everyone had a dream, Yun knew it. Luko, his friend, dreamt of becoming a soldier, of fighting in war and becoming a hero to be remembered and renowned. His little sister, he knew, dreamt of marrying a noble prince, of becoming a princess and a high queen. His mother and father had a dream too, that's why they had left that day. But Luko, slow and helpless as he was, would never become a great a hero—Yun was the one who would always save him from the other kids. And his sister, with her toothless grin would never even meet a prince, let alone come to marry one. And his parents, even their dream was futile, for they had failed to return. No Yun did not have a dream—he had a purpose. He would journey across the continent, he would cross the Scar as they did, all the way to the Other Side, and he would save his parents. Because they were waiting.
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The pov is meant to be a 12 year old so it's kinda meant to read a bit childish. Please tell me what you guys think?

This the introductory paragraph to my story. What do you guys think?

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Everyone had a dream, Yun knew it. Luko, his friend, dreamt of becoming a soldier, of fighting in war and becoming a hero to be remembered and renowned. His little sister, he knew, dreamt of marrying a noble prince, of becoming a princess and a high queen. His mother and father had a dream too, that's why they had left that day. But Luko, slow and helpless as he was, would never become a great a hero—Yun was the one who would always save him from the other kids. And his sister, with her toothless grin would never even meet a prince, let alone come to marry one. And his parents, even their dream was futile, for they had failed to return. No Yun did not have a dream—he had a purpose. He would journey across the continent, he would cross the Scar as they did, all the way to the Other Side, and he would save his parents. Because they were waiting.
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The pov is meant to be a 12 year old so it's kinda meant to read a bit childish. Please tell me what you guys think?

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I am also on chapter 14 of Orberg right now. I'm considering doing all 3 books at the same time. I have the free time to do so and I'm a recovering coomer who needs to stay productive when I'm not working.

I think there comes a point in self loathing and depression where everything you've done in life, so minor and unremembered by everyone, starts to look good.

My entire artistic drive and desire which consumed the last decade of my life has nothing to show for it; except for the few hundred views on my blog or a popular thread on 4chan. It ends up making me feel like it was worth it, just for the tiny number of people whose lives it touched.

Someone post a tier list of American writers. Or some sort of chart. Thanks.

I've been planning a story in my head for the past week, prowling the internet for writing advice, have a MS Word open.

But I still can't bring myself to write the first letter.

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