/lit/ - Literature

>>22470893
This one's even more like a unstructured soup of images!

But the fact that you push it so far makes it more interesting. It's kind of hallucinatory, seeing the same phrases circle around and around. If you're trying to communicate how it must feel to be a lovelorn shade, wandering upon the asphodel, in a permanent twilight, then I think it's successful.

(Incidentally, it reminds me a little bit of the circling repetition of John Ashbery's Hotel Lautremont: https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poems/52162/hotel-lautreamont))