/lit/ - Literature

/tg/ go-er here, and unsure of this new /lit/. Did all my writefaggatory in /tg/, so forgive me if I ask for an audience.

I dream up stories and write certain ones that keep my attention for more than a day or two. Started last night, slept on it and woke up continuing it (rare). I would like to present a rough outline of the story here before I start on the story in full detail. Nothing book worthy imo but, I do want some input because it seems mary sue to me.

So would any of you critique a bit for me?
(I haven't started anything yet and will be typing a while if someone says yes.)