/lit/ - Literature

>>10625139
Seems kind of retarded, anon. The first sentence, where "too curvy yet never abrupt in change of tangents, is too ideal to not lose my train of thought when I see it", is extremely hard to follow.

I believe mixing in the real-life descriptions with better imagery and the narrator's thoughts together would help widen your audience to people who find it gay to imagine what it's like to be a woman and dominate men, because I stopped reading there.