/lit/ - Literature

>>20817409
>Transfixed is still purple
Completely wrong. How can a single word, in its appropriate context and that 99.99% of readers could define kn sight, make the line purple? I define Purple as using uncommon words/phrasing in a way that disrupts clarity which is not the ca a e here. Define with specificity what makes something "purple" in your view.

I am willing to die on this hill.

>first person narration makes it especially so
Even more wrong. If the POV voice favors more flowery speech than it actually demands the use of "better" dictionary. If your POV is a child or moron than yes don't use big words.

>No one thinks to themselves "Oh boy I am transfixed by this."
Intelligent people do on reflection. I've been transfixed by things. Have you never seen a beautiful sunset or animal and just not wanted to look away?

>>20238818
First paragraph offers very little clarity, also pic related:
>Macabre miasma
>A cursed concerto, accompanied by a choir of retching babes, a distant hum of biplanes, and a soft patter of rain.

Read: http://www.perseus.tufts.edu/hopper/text?doc=Perseus%3Atext%3A1999.01.0060%3Abook%3D3