/lit/ - Literature

>>17007107
Right, that's the thing. I'm in a tenuous position. It's tricky being associated with 4chan when you've got nothing to your name.

If and when I truly become famous, I'll come back here, and you'll all know when I do. Because if I'm famous I won't have to fear anyone, and I can reveal my longstanding 4chan use with impunity. Or, maybe people will get mad at me, but I can add it to my mystique.

And even so, I won't share anything in text. Fear of triggering agents and editors, and such. That's probably not as much of a fear at this point, but it is there.

This is a snippet of a narrative poem I wrote in 2019. A trial run for a larger project. It made use of a world, and characters, and a bigger story, that I have been treating of in my bigger work.

The meter for this was fun to work out because I was heavily inspired by Brahms' 4th Symphony. And the poem takes place in the springtime, and flowers are a recurring motif. So I wanted to try and generate a metrical aspect that was inspired by the "swinging" element of the first movement of Brahms' 4th Symphony, and that would also, perhaps, suggest the way fields of flowers sway back and forth in the Spring breeze.

What I wound up coming up with is an unrhymed couplet where the first stanza consists of fourteen syllables, and the second stanza consists of thirteen syllables.

I'm told it's sometimes awkward, but I was satisfied with the result. I've posted this screencap before, so apologies if you've already seen it.

>>15988352
I'm just not sure it's ready yet. Even when I've finished the initial writing I can already tell that I'm going to have to do a significant amount of editing. Maybe I'm just gun-shy about this particular work because it's my baby and I want to treat it with the utmost care.

I'll post something I've posted before. This was a narrative poem I wrote back in 2019 that's set in the same universe as this big work of mine, and features many of the same characters. This poem was fun to write because it takes place in the Spring and fields of flowers are a prominent dramatic motif in it, so I sculpted the meter of the poem to try and capture the sensation of flowers swaying back and forth in the Spring breeze. That's why the primary metrical construction of this particular poem was an unrhymed couplet consisting of one fourteen-syllable line followed by one thirteen-syllable line.

I like to think I've improved as both a writer and a poet since I wrote this, even though it was only a few months ago. Or, at least this is what I hope.

>>14570140
I've posted this before. It's a screencap of a section of one of the narrative poems I've written for the overall work. People have said that the meter doesn't always work (it's an unrhymed couplet of fourteen syllable and thirteen syllable lines) but they seemed to like it, overall.

>>14451765
This >>14451770 isn't me. The screenshot's not a bad idea. Here you go. This poem's written in a kind of unrhymed couplet, with the first line having fourteen syllables and the second line having thirteen syllables. It was an unusual meter and it took a while to get the hang of, but I wanted to do it because the "swaying" of the couplet, the alternation between line lengths, was something I thought would call to mind the swaying of flowers in the Spring breeze. This poem takes place in springtime, and flowers play an important part in the plot.