/lit/ - Literature

>PROLOGUE:
>It was a dark and stormy and grim and hardcore night. The air was thick with a vague sense of eroticism and futuristic mysticism. It was also kind of humid, too. In the city of Robo-Mesopotamia, every night is like this. The days are pleasant and refreshing, but too few remember that day gives into night.

>Robo-Mesopotamia is the capital of Future Earth, the name given to describe Earth's state in the future. The darkness and grimness of night is contrasted by the blazing city lights. The silence of a world ravaged by the Gyrotanium Robocalypse is interrupted by the angry voices of bad guys. However, tonight, only one bad guy roams the streets.

>And this bad guy is a girl.

>And a cyborg.

>And she's the only bad guy because she killed the other bad guys. All by herself. In one night.
With her chainsaw fingers.

>>625332
You probably never heard of Cyborg Assassin Girl:


PROLOGUE:

It was a dark and stormy and grim and hardcore night. The air was thick with a vague sense of eroticism and futuristic mysticism. It was also kind of humid, too. In the city of Robo-Mesopotamia, every night is like this. The days are pleasant and refreshing, but too few remember that day gives into night.

Robo-Mesopotamia is the capital of Future Earth, the name given to describe Earth's state in the future. The darkness and grimness of night is contrasted by the blazing city lights. The silence of a world ravaged by the Gyrotanium Robocalypse is interrupted by the angry voices of bad guys. However, tonight, only one bad guy roams the streets.

And this bad guy is a girl.

And a cyborg.

And she's the only bad guy because she killed the other bad guys. All by herself. In one night.
With her chainsaw fingers.

PROLOGUE:

It was a dark and stormy and grim and hardcore night. The air was thick with a vague sense of eroticism and futuristic mysticism. It was also kind of humid, too. In the city of Robo-Mesopotamia, every night is like this. The days are pleasant and refreshing, but too few remember that day gives into night.

Robo-Mesopotamia is the capital of Future Earth, the name given to describe Earth's state in the future. The darkness and grimness of night is contrasted by the blazing city lights. The silence of a world ravaged by the Gyrotanium Robocalypse is interrupted by the angry voices of bad guys. However, tonight, only one bad guy roams the streets.

And this bad guy is a girl.

And a cyborg.

And she's the only bad guy because she killed the other bad guys. All by herself. In one night.
With her chainsaw fingers.

A couple of days ago, a brilliant tripfag with the most delicate prose, posted an amusing and thrilling story set in the distant future about a cyborg assassin girl, introducing other characters and novel SciFi concepts.

Unfortunately, he only posted a couple of pages but I find myself wanting more of this. Where are you, Beat The Devil? /lit/ demands more!

I want you guys to critique the prologue of my novel, if you wouldn't mind. Thanks in advance.

PROLOGUE:

It was a dark and stormy and grim and hardcore night. The air was thick with a vague sense of eroticism and futuristic mysticism. It was also kind of humid, too. In the city of Robo-Mesopotamia, every night is like this. The days are pleasant and refreshing, but too few remember that day gives into night.

Robo-Mesopotamia is the capital of Future Earth, the name given to describe Earth's state in the future. The darkness and grimness of night is contrasted by the blazing city lights. The silence of a world ravaged by the Gyrotanium Robocalypse is interrupted by the angry voices of bad guys. However, tonight, only one bad guy roams the streets.

And this bad guy is a girl.

And a cyborg.

And she's the only bad guy because she killed the other bad guys. All by herself. In one night.
With her chainsaw fingers.