/lit/ - Literature

>>23274709
>Kinda hard to understand the sentence.
It's meant to be blasts of radiation, but I didn't want to actually use that term as it's too modern.

It is supposed to look like the sparks of fireworks for him, with blue core and rainbow edges.

Thanks for the advice on the pronouns

>>23274781
I see. I originally didn't want to bog down the reader with too many descriptions.

I gotta ask, was it clear enough from Sei Zan calling Bak Sing "milk mama" that she was his wet nurse when he was a baby? I wanted that to be clear but I didn't just want to have him think of her as his former wet nurse.