/lit/ - Literature

>>12980577

>plasmatic laser rifle
>ramirez

It was allright, know that youve got an interesting world so show more of it. When they in the chopper why not describe what the characters see.
Open dessert, ruined towns? Some highway jammed with dead vehicles? Helps with the worldbuilding and setting. Same with the bunker they was in.

Furthermore. Explain how characters look, if you dont wanna do it dont include them as characters.

Less "fucks", swearing is generally a no-go

Final tip: keep action sequences limited. You can have them firefight with drones sure but describing every action gets tedious and readers dont like that. Find a better way of conveying action. If you limit mechanical action scenes they impact more when they do appear

>125 yards. 5 men. 400 Null Drones.

I liked this.

>>12962495