/lit/ - Literature

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Here's an example of what helped me a little. I wrote this for the thread some days back. Most feedback centered around Clipped being the favorite "style" and Standard (my usual prose) being perfectly readable, but utilitarian and uninteresting. Which I had figured, so I waxed a little extra in Flowery and Impressionist. I came to the conclusion after a week's testing by myself that what I need most is to mix up the prose. Any one of these styles on their own won't always work in a story with many dynamic beats. Now I try to mix my Standard style with the other three depending on the mood.
It's most likely you're in the same boat I was. You've reached a point in your general prose that you can clearly convey ideas and situations. The next steps you would take get into a plateau zone of serious grammar study or even more rigidly defined exploration of ideas that, while technically masterful, might be unfulfilling to read--kind of like the way Germans play piano. So you may need to hit the experimentation button and try to write even just one paragraph in many distinct ways.
I should note this is an ongoing project of mine, still. I should be putting more time into this than I am, but I fall into the "Well I know my Standard prose feels comfy to write in and I want to get some work done so I'll just write in that" zone too often after a long day of work.

Alright, round two of voice testing. Prompt was MC sword sparring with his buddeh. I tried to really stress the differences and hopefully this time the prompt paragraph was interesting enough to get clear differences in scene style. I can tell they're particularly tryhard and not finely edited, but I'm going for differences in tone to see which direction I should be taking my voice. I'm willing to be cringe to improve.

I'd really like some feedback from everyone who can give it. Which one do you like the best and why?