/lit/ - Literature

Still looking for feedback on this short story I’ve completed about a college student who learns to cope with alienation through the aid of a strange bump on his head. Influences are Kafka, Shakespeare, Charlotte Bronte, and the anime Serial Experiments Lain, so if that interests you, please take a look. I’ll post the first 3 pages and can post more if anyone is interested. Will be going through the thread and giving feedback as well.

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I’m posting the first 3 pages of a short story I just finished. The premise is as follows “A lonely college student gets a mysterious bump on his head that teaches him how to cope with alienation.”. It’s derivative, I know, but if intriguing at all please read, provide feedback, and let me know if you’d like me to post the remaining 5 pages. Thanks ahead of time.