/lit/ - Literature

I havn't had feedback on my creative writing since highschool, and none on writing generally aside "be more concise," because of what I study. If any of you guys could spare a moment to read what I have below and offer your thoughts, I would appreciate it a lot. I don't have any talents that I've have found yet, and was told growing up I could write well for my age. So, I just want to know whether some of you guys think I have potential, or if writing isn't my niche either. Professors are too busy and friends + family care more about not being insulting, I hoped maybe I could find some honest criticism here. I'll make two more posts below.

How do you plebs get epub books? Pic unrelated.

Who here can read ancient greek and how did you learn?

Oh, Irony

I praise my world's new idle
a grand new-old ideal
an old friend turned sour,
now jesting new power.
Rusted quests gleaming, set for battle
using our old “friend” as saddle
for an ancient quest now turned comedy.
Oh, revolution of this tool turned for its own present deed,
oh deed of fun deaths, oh deed of dull liveliness, oh deed of deeds.

After the bombs and sickle fell
we now have our “comrade” in sale.
Oh how grand it is to sit on the Gaza boarder,
oh what fun it is for ISIS and Kurds to quarter.

Comrade I know your ways
How you fool the rich, and poor alike for days;
poor can't wait “gobble more”
rich lust for controlling outpours.

You have them in a vice loose unseen.
You would kill your hostess with no remorse,
knowing that death's better than this corpse.

Now I will traitor my warning on deck
and end this ode turned betrayal with a, kek.

>>6455555
High five!