/lit/ - Literature

>>20150239
Thank you! That's it for this story, I don't know if it'd make sense to expand it.
I posted this a few weeks ago, it's a little similar.

>>20038694
>>20038023
600 words in 28 hours is not great, but hey, at least I finished.
Given the exercise it might be too heavy on speech over narration (more than half), and the narration that there is could be less analytic. It's still more narration than I'm used to mixing through my dialogue so I count it as a success.
I'd like to keep doing these.