/lit/ - Literature

>>18402679
I think poetry is allowed since poetry resources are included in the general.
Your poem shows a striking image and even conveys a sense of time space (mostly due to the river stanza) which can be hard in a confessional poem with a rhyme scheme. The major downside is it seems choked and stilted. The actual content is great but the use of "hath" instead of "have" and the strange "woe'd" in the last stanza throws off attention to the good points.
The poem itself shows a talent struggling to overcome a compulsion for order and forced rhyme. You create a strong, dynamic image though, which shows potential. I would love to see you write a poem with less structure. I think it would allow that image to come out even stronger.