/lit/ - Literature

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>had slipped
>was trudging
These would be better in the past tense.
>she chose,
Remove.
>stood poised in a blow
A blow is usually a punch. I'd say 'At the top of the slope, a gust of wind ballooned...' or something similar.
>What was new was a
Remove. 'An unfamiliar sea-green notebook lay by the sink.'
>And then I had nothing left to do but crack the cover.
There should be a tinge of sneakiness or hesitation or something here.
>It was her handwriting...
>It was 'palatial' that...
I'd change one of these
>evidently
remove
>high stakes, and Zolia,
'high stakes; and Zoila'
>each
'both' Otherwise it sounds like the whole crew is surrounded instead of the two players.
>The kitchen door was unstuck
'came unstuck'

I like it. It's cute.

Is there a good fantasy book that isn’t part of some trilogy+? Just one solid book.