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Anonymous Thu Mar 16 03:02:37 2023 No.21791036 [View]
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>What you guys think? Too much exposition, retard descriptions and dialogue? It's something different that I'm writing for fun, while I am away from home.

You've got a w40k vibe that could do well on RR. They tend to like tough guy protagonists.

A little too much exposition with names and titles and so on. Leave somethings unexplained at first to create curiosity. Add details as you go. Most people can figure things out through context anyway.

It's overall a little too brief. It reads like a summary. You should tease out the interrogation scene and add more dialog.

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