/lit/ - Literature

>>21991174
This is a really good idea. Thanks for reading and for the suggestion anon.
>>21991180
>X but actually Y
Ah yeah, I struggle all the time with that and it's always tough to see when I do it. I was trying to describe something like pic related, but I don't know how effective it was. Thanks for reading and commenting man.
>>21991593
>>21991608
Thank you both very much for reading and for the feedback. I've been trying to make my prose a bit less simplistic but I still have some trouble with the issues you brought up. Not persnickety at all either. Been dying for other ways to describe melted steel so that's super useful, kek.
>>2199very much for reading and for the kind words anon. Honored you liked it as someone who's worked in a factory.
>>21991842
Kek, never actually worked in any sort of steel mill or factory so I'll take your work for it. Thanks for reading anon, really happy to hear the description felt accurate to you.